Flash Movie Im Working On

[Death505]

Tell Me How This is guys ive posted the first episode it got a 3.00 this one is part 2 its half done tell me how this is so far

http://media.putfile.com/Update-62

[Zeltaris]

Eh... don't take this the wrong way, but it needs a LOT of work. It's really short, even for half a movie [and I know you're hating me for this, seeing how it took you at least an hour or 2 to make].
Also, the text moves by too fast. It's unreadable unless one has instant-scan sight.
Your character's movements are also a bit hard to believe. The story is packed too quickly, so I really have very little knowledge on what's going on. The part of it that happens at night, is it the tournament?
The gunshooting is nice, though :D
Oh, and the music doesn't cut off at the end. Instead it continues and overlaps when you return to the play screen.

So yeah, you realy need to improve a lot on it.

[Sithius]

Dollars, not dollors. The text in the beginning was really bad, black and it was over black lines and such, did not look pretty. The text from the conversation flew by waay to fast, no way that any man could read that :D. But the gunshooting was kinda nice :P

[Hasharin]

needs work. I once made a 5 minute flash spoof of the Invasion of Aiur, but i lost my USB key which had everything on it.


youre txt was too fast, the storyline needs work, youer spellnig sucked.

I'd show you mine but i forgot to back it up. 2 month's work down the drain. :cry:

[SilverCrusader]

if it weren't for the bad spelling mistakes... it might actually be good... and I don't think some people can read as fast as me.