Emerald Please

[Frattimonde]

(Another sweet little poem by yours truly.)

Emerald Please

Emerald green hiding beneath the ice
Unveiled in a dream on summers' eve
This frozen cold seems so distant
And this dream is so near

O how long for its' warmth, it seems so nice
Joyful prayer to my heart
A dancing light in the night
To chase away this grim-biting cold

Emerald please come to me
Chase away this sorrow in my soul
Sing me beautiful hymns

Warm my soul, o sweet emerald dream

[Markpyro]

Soul and peace are themes that are completely overused, and the poem is too short to further the meaning within that. Also,
"it seems so nice",
"A dancing light in the night"
You need some new adjectives.

[Frattimonde]

Soul and peace are themes that are completely overused, and the poem is too short to further the meaning within that. Also,
"it seems so nice",
"A dancing light in the night"
You need some new adjectives. I knows, just "boring time" poetry when no customers where downstairs where I work. (I do work in a bookstore ^^ Office supplies mostly.)

[ShadowGonissa]

I really like it. Very sweet, and sounds Irish. It helps if you listen to some Connie Dover when you read it. :D

[Frattimonde]

It helps if you listen to some Connie Dover when you read it. :D Connie who? :concern:

[ShadowGonissa]

I dunno. Some Celt chick. I was listening to her on internet radio.