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wa123
01-11-2007, 9:04 PM
I walk past a dark shadow, I lost direction.

Forward my arm in the dark mist, there is nothing so I touch myself and warn not to go further, but I notice my right arm is not with me, I need to search for it.

It feel like I'm totally fall into this dark mist, in this dark forest I open my eye, then smash my head making sure I don't fall into this darkness anymore.

I tell myself I'm lucky at least my eye and head are still with me.

I step on the water mug, and notice I don't have weight, I want to laugh, but notice I don't have a mouth.

Suddenly I start to sink, I pride to the water I will give up my ear if it let me move on, at last I was on the shore.

In my heart I promise my ear that I will seek it back as soon as I found my right arm.

Wind blow on me, and there is sand in the wind, I think this is my faith, I must walk through this, so I wipe away my tear and continue my journey.

Walk pass a garden, I saw sea flower, I feel like sneeze, but I can't because I don't have a a nose, I question why sea flower appear in the garden, never the less, I take a deep breath and I press on.

I reach a dead end, there is a door, there is some wisp blocking my way,

inside there is no dimension, no tree no flower, but a tided soul.

I speak to myself, is not tree, nor flower that I'm searching, I came to seek my right arm.

wisp turn into a key, the door way open at last, I can only see a mirror.

In the mirror....

I see myself, with no eye, no mouth, no eye, no nose, except 5 legs.


I notice ----
 
 



 
I'm Right Arm.



Wa123

Protosschick99
01-12-2007, 2:53 AM
I believe this is in the wrong forum :P Try posting this in Creative Concepts buddy :D

KexMex
01-12-2007, 5:21 PM
I... uhm...

I don't really get it.

Vhaeraun
01-14-2007, 4:03 PM
>.>

<.<

Huh?

ShadowGonissa
01-14-2007, 10:31 PM
I really like it. What you're trying to say is, the speaker feels that he is a complete person, but he really isn't. The things he meets in the world sharpen him, reducing him to a certain bodily item.

This can be symbolically translated into how life changes you from one person to another over the years, and that each person was made into something with purpose, something that can do certain things but not others. The poem says that people are incomplete, and that they need each other, and that no human can live without other people in their lives.

Protosschick99
01-19-2007, 1:40 PM
Oh. Okay, lolz :P