Rp i was making wat do you thinK

[Windwalker]

Rp:Tears Of Orion
Background: The three largest kingdoms (Nevarak,Imperial Order, Republic) have begun a deadly war with each other.
Neither knows how this war has started, and the kingdoms do not want to backdown. The only kingdom that may
challenge them and bring them peace has erupted in a deadly civil war. The smaller and neutral kingdoms are now
forced to choose sides. Seeing a chance at freedom and the chance to take over the world; Demons, fortune seekers,
mages, and many others choose now to take up arms and sieze what they can. But fortunally this is becoming impossibly
to due, since there is to little land to many people.


Class-
Light:
Bowman->Archer->Hunter->Ranger
Swordsman->Master Swordsman->Knight->Blade master
Apprentice->Magi->Mage->Archmage
(More to be added)

Dark:
(monster only)Baby->Mature->skilled->Legendary
D. Magi->Demonic->Demon Mage-> Demonic Master
D. Swordsman->Demonic Fiend->Death Knight->D. Blademaster
(more to be added)

Neutral:
N/A

Places:
Info:There are 4 Contintents within the world of Orion, there are The Forgotten land, Ishimaral, Dialaman, Land Of Elders.
The Neverak kingdom is located on Ishimaral Contintent along with small kingdom of Luskiya. This Contintent is contected to
a Dialaman Contintent through a land bridge that is only aviable during the summer tides.

On this Contintent the Republic and Imperial Order wage war.

The Forgotten Lands are surrouned in year around mist, the people that live there are to be from
fairy tales. In that places lie Dwarves, Elves, Mintours, and many other creatures.

The Land of Elders are controlled by Council of The 5 powers, but currently a civil war has begun within this council and
there are now at war.


Forgotten Land Cities/Places:
The Iron Forge Mountain;
Drafor: A city within the mountains, it is heavily defend by thousand of dwarves and they now currently have
stopped trade and allows noone within there city.This is city is controlled by the IronSmith Clan.

Iron Forge: A devled deeply into the earth, here is where the dwarves live and multiply. This City is controlled by the
Heavy fist clan.

(More to be added)


Ishimaral cities/places:


Note*-If this gets good marks i might actually open it.......

Players:
Race:
Class:
Location:
Weapon:
Affiliation:
Background:

[madman5]

Sounds good, but if you get aproval by the some1 great like Ender, then open it.

[Frattimonde]

Perhaps you should have "Materia" as a option.

Which would tell what type of magick that your character primarily uses.

[Valjean]

How do you level up? O_o

I assumed leveling up was involved with the different levels...O_o

[Protosschick99]

Rp: Tears Of Orion

Background: The three largest kingdoms (Nevarak, Imperial Order, Republic) have begun a deadly war with each other. Neither knows how this war has started, and the kingdoms do not want to backdown. The only kingdom that may challenge them and bring them peace has erupted in a deadly civil war. The smaller and neutral kingdoms are now forced to choose sides. Seeing a chance at freedom and the chance to take over the world; Demons, fortune seekers, mages, and many others choose now to take up arms and sieze what they can. But fortunately this is becoming impossible to do, since there is too little land and too many people.


Class-
Light:
Bowman->Archer->Hunter->Ranger
Swordsman->Master Swordsman->Knight->Blade master
Apprentice->Magi->Mage->Archmage
(More to be added)

Dark:
(monster only)Baby->Mature->skilled->Legendary
D. Magi->Demonic->Demon Mage-> Demonic Master
D. Swordsman->Demonic Fiend->Death Knight->D. Blademaster
(more to be added)

Neutral:
N/A

Places:
Info:There are 4 Contintents within the world of Orion, there are The Forgotten land, Ishimaral, Dialaman, Land Of Elders.
The Neverak kingdom is located on Ishimaral Contintent along with small kingdom of Luskiya. This Contintent is contected to
a Dialaman Contintent through a land bridge that is only aviable during the summer tides.

On this Contintent the Republic and Imperial Order wage war.

The Forgotten Lands are surrounded year around in mist. The people that live there are to be from fairy tales. In that place lie Dwarves, Elves, Mintours, and many other creatures.

The Land of Elders are controlled by Council of The 5 powers, but currently a civil war has begun within this council and they are now at war.


Forgotten Land Cities/Places:
The Iron Forge Mountain;
Drafor: A city within the mountains, it is heavily defended by thousands of dwarves and they now currently have stopped trade and allow no one within their city.This city is controlled by the IronSmith Clan.

Iron Forge: A devled deeply into the earth, here is where the dwarves live and multiply. This City is controlled by the Heavy fist clan.

(More to be added)


Ishimaral cities/places:


Note*-If this gets good marks I might actually open it.......

Players:
Race:
Class:
Location:
Weapon:
Affiliation:
Background:
Okay, I'll add a few remarks of my own....First off, you might wanna try adding correct spelling and grammar. Everything in bold is what I corrected. There is more that I corrected, like words that didn't need to be included in your story.

Also, when you are posting, try to put the paragraph together and not all over the place. I put that together for you too. :p

I think it's a very good storyline though. I'd join if you had it open! :D

[Ender]

Sounds good, but if you get aproval by the some1 great like Ender, then open it.More stuff like that, I'll be made a Mod anytime now. Which would be really cool.
FYI, I'm not the only great RPer here. Werewolf, Blackhawk, Sub, PC, and Geno are really awesome too, just to name a few.

You definitely need more classes and more places. I know you wanted to get a general response on this, but most of the time I would say just finish the RP before you post anything.

And personally, after you make the changes PC mentioned, and the ones I specified, I'm totally in. Sounds cool, if we can keep it alive. I would also wait to release until the third week of June or something. Everyone is out of school by then, because most of the RPers are still in school.

[madman5]

Yeah that would be the best idea. It's an ok start, I mean for a beginers Rp it's pretty grood. I mean good. great and good.

[Whiteknight]

FYI, I'm not the only great RPer here. Werewolf, Blackhawk, Sub, PC, and Geno are really awesome too, just to name a few.

Bah, you forgot me. Ask pretty much anyone (including Geno, BH, and WW). It's just that most of my RPs have died... Sigh... I really need to RP right now, I like writing.

I'll join this if you open it. I'm desperate for something.

[Ender]

I said "just to name a few." You are good too, and there are others, but I've RPed with them the most.

[Windwalker]

Would anyone like to help me or give me ideas?

[Nostradamus]

Im in this rp!
But like were said, how do you level up?
Put in a materia part.
Give a suggestion of a few races.
And just for the records,
how could a war start if the 3 cities did not know its purpose?

[GrassDragon]

I would join this RP also. Element/materia wouldn't be a bad idea. Maybe a back story on why everyone is fighting might be good; as RPguy said, why would it even start if they don't know why?

[Ender]

Stranger things have happened. U.S. almost went to war over a tree once.

[Windwalker]

For any ideas and improvment send via pm

Rp:Tears Of Orion
Background: The three largest kingdoms (Nevarak, Imperial Order, Republic) have begun a deadly war with each other. This war had started with small feuds and breaking ties between these nations. But a unknown event, probably by a evil person has escalated this feud into wars. Neither knows how this war has started, and the kingdoms do not want to back down. The only kingdom that may challenge them and bring them peace has erupted in a deadly civil war. The smaller and neutral kingdoms are now forced to choose sides. Seeing a chance at freedom and the chance to take over the world; Demons, fortune seekers, mages, and many others choose now to take up arms and seize what they can. But fortunately this is becoming impossible to due, since there is too little land and too many people.


Class-
Bowman->Archer->Hunter->Ranger
Swordsman->Master Swordsman->Knight->Blade master
Apprentice->Magi->Mage->Archmage
(monster only)Baby->Mature->skilled->Legendary
D. Magi->Demonic->Demon Mage-> Demonic Master
D. Swordsman->Demonic Fiend->Death Knight->D. Blademaster
Squire- Knight2- Lord- Lord Knight
Pick Pocket-Theif- Bandit- Bandit Lord

Location Background:
There are 4 Contintents within the world of Orion, there are The Forgotten land, Ishimaral, Dialaman, Land Of Elders.
The Neverak kingdom is located on Ishimaral Contintent along with small kingdom of Luskiya. This Contintent is contected to a Dialaman Contintent through a land bridge that is only aviable during the summer tides.

On this Contintent the Republic and Imperial Order wage war.

The Forgotten Lands are surrounded year in around mist. The people that live there are to be from
fairy tales. In that places lie Dwarves, Elves, Mintours, and many other creatures.

The Land of Elders are controlled by Council of The 5 powers, but currently a civil war has begun within this council and there are now at war.


Forgotten Land Cities/Places:
"I am amazed at the things i find here every day"
*Note* These are the large city or have some importance
The Iron Forge Mountain;
"The Iron Forge Mountains, a deadly place and many have invaded these lands and all have failed
Drafor: A city within the mountains, it is heavily defended by hundreds of dwarves and they now currently have stopped trade and allow no one within thier city.This is city is controlled by the Iron Smith Clan.
“Drafor a city of darkness and wonder, within these halls I find dwarfs who are ready with there weapons of war”

Iron Forge: A devled deeply into the earth, here is where the dwarves live and multiply. This City is controlled by the Heavy fist clan.
“Here I find dwarves a plenty along with spectacular treasures.”

Hammer Hall: A city on the easternmost entrance to the Iron Forge mountains, generates the most trade and is the friendliest with other nations such as elves and dwarves. This city is controlled by Free Trade alliance
“Buy this, but that is all I hear within these walls. But I see goods from many far off regions.

The Misty Forest (South of the Iron Forge mountain);
"The misty forest is well full of mist and rain, these rains sustain plants and animals not found anywhere else"
Sylvan: The Elven Capital, the city is surrounded in year around rain and the city produces the finest goods that are known within the Forgotten Lands. This city is controlled by the Elven Vangaurd.
“Trees, trees is all I see. But it seems that these elven childern wish to avoid me.”

Ni’Val: The Elven port, here lie great warriors and explores. Here the elves allow trade with other nation. This city is controlled by the Elven Vangaurd.
“Here is another great market, with exotic goods. And the elves here are not afraid me but enjoy my company”

The Northern Marshes (North Of Iron Forge Mountain);
"A deadly place if your not careful, the smell of dead flesh surrounds the air and feeling of pure evil surrounds you as you enter the Marsh"
Ogre Camp: The ogre camp is controlled by Heavy Eye Chieftain and they retain the most power of the ogre tribes.
"These brutes maintain some respect for each other. Yet they fight over petty things. Such as who has the better stick....."

Lesser Humans Villages: The Lesser humans surive off scavenging and canibalism.
"A place where many would not like to be..."

*Note* Many other creatures lie in wait here

The Barren:
"A dark and dastardly wasteland, filled with carrion of those who treaded into this mighty monument to nature"
Minotaur Head VIllage: The head of the Minotaur tribes, here if you wish the Minotaur assistance in battle, you ask the great tribal elders.
"The Tribal Elders are swift, decisive, and fair in there decision."

Kurash: The desert trade city were bar fights and greed run free. This city is controlled by the Free Trade Alliance.
"Kurash and city of bandits"


Ishimaral cities/places:


Factions:
Forgotten Land:
1)Free Trade Alliance-Currently neutral with all
2)Minotaur Tribes
3)Elven Vangaurd
Dwarf Clans;
4)Iron Smith
5)Heavy Fist-
6) Small Nations:
Example- Ogre Tribes in the Northern Marshes.

Dialaman:
1)Republic
2)Imperial Order
3)Various Bandit groups
Ishimaral:
1)Neverak-Allied to Luskiya
2)Luskiya- Allied to Neverak

Land of the Elders:
1)
2)
3)
4)
5)

Players Name:
Race:
Class:
Location:
Weapon & Weapon Speciality: So what weapon you have and what weapon you do best with
Affiliation: Who do you side with?
Background: A descripition of your character Magic *Note* For final form only except mage classes:


Other Important Items:
Materia is allowed in weapons and is considered to be the magical properties of the weapon. This is allowed in "Higher Class Weapons", not common class weapons.


Leveling System:

[Ender]

Are you officially opening it?

[Windwalker]

not yet its the improved version, i still need to add the other city and finalize the leveling system.
Ender i really could use your help

[Protosschick99]

Umm, did you like totally ignore my spelling corrections? You still have the same paragraph, spelling, punctuation, and grammar errors! (Except for a few) FIX IT MAN! Fix it!! :p

[Ender]

What kind of help do you need? Give me something specific and I'll be glad to oblige.