Kryonica City-REBORN

[DarkMirror]

Kryonica City is a small, Isolated city on the planet of Garvand's Grace perched betwen the Kazent Jungle and Sepharth Sea, consisting of a large main section with bridges extending to an island. It was colonised in the year 2318. It has always thrived on scientific research and a bustling trade center. But recently, strange things have been happening. Bad luck prevails, and a dark storm is rising. But the rains are yet to come...

Kryonica is devided into six sperate sectors, as descriped below.

Zamex: The tradeing center for Kryonica, Zamex contains the Plaza, where all of the most exotic things can be bought. it is, of course, the most exotic of all the sectors, and within it can be ffound just about anything.
Tryton: The residental sector, Tryton is the largest sector, covering half of the mainland section and most of the island. It has a warm, bright appearance, with bright storefronts and well kept streets.
Kronno: The cities industrial center. The main power generato and several factories are contained here. It is a dismal place, with dark, miskept streets and shady dealings.
Corvek: Here you will find the scum of the city; the administrators. Also found here are the cities defence force's headquarters and the governments embassy. This sector is very orderly, and is seldom traveled.
Sasann: Here the cities pride and joy resides; its scientific and acedemic community. Universities, labs, and testing centers can be found every second block, and you will find much hubbub here. its apearance is similar to Corvek, but its also much more friendly.
Shaauk: The cities smallest sector, this place deals with travelers comings and goings. It aslo contains the cities only spaceport.

Characters will be expected to life out a normal life for a while, but I will start up a chain of events that should make for an exiting game. I will have no active PC, but I will have several NPCs that I will use. This RP will be a similar style to a video game, with "cutscenes" to introducve new elements oif the RP.
Your charactert sheets should look somthing like this;
Name: (Obvious)
Age: (18 and up)
Occupation: (Think of somthing futery)
Description: (Obvious)
Bio: (Obvious)

[HyperDemonic]

Name: Kain Zaraba
Age: 28
Occupation: Weapon Designer/Maker
Description: 6'2'', Short Dark Bloned Hair, always wares Black Pants and Black T-shirt , And a Dark red Belt that holds his latest Invention a Rx-5 Sword.


Bio(you forgot this): Kain Works for the army's Futrue wepaon program, Designing Weapons for futrue use, he inventd some of the weapons that are yet to come out to use. these invention contain the Anti Grav. boots,Trafangium Body Armor, RX-1-4 Weapons,and many more, his latest is the Rx-5 Weapon, a Sword.

Anti Grav. Boots:Boots that a give the user the abillite to jump 20 feet high and about 40 feet far. due to the force need for these jumps the power supply runs out after 3 jumps.

Trafangium Body Armor:Kain spent months deveiloping the metal Trafangium, a metal more 20 times harder than harden titainium. the other day he made it into body armor.

RX-1-4 Weapons: The frist 4 weapons kain made.
1. The Hail Storm Mark 2, a more powerful version of year 2006s Hail Storm.
2. The Tera Blaster, this weapon is the size of a bluiding,Shoots Lighting.
3. The Force Glove, This glove kills enemys by grabing ,blows up users hand.
5. Flare Burst Gun, like a flare gun but much more powerful,Burns insantly.

RX-5 Sword:unlike the other RX weapons this one is not still is testing, a sword cut with lasers, to where the edge is really sharp . That way it can cut thourght alot of stuff. Only a few made becuse the cutting takes days


there it is tell me if any thing is to advance

[DarkMirror]

well, the only thing I dont like is carrying the sword around. You CAN replace it with a projectile weapon though. Its just realy advanced.
Oh, but if you have access to these, It can work out later on in the story. You WILL get to use at least some of them.

[HyperDemonic]

the reason why he is holding it

unlike the other RX weapons this one is not still is testing,


and i guess ll edit it to where is is less sharp

[DarkMirror]

yes, but its still a very powerfull weapon, and hes still walking around in public with it.

[DarkMirror]

Ok, I think this died.
Why cant anybody ever play my RPs? I had such a good idea!

[Vhaeraun]

Ok, I think this died.
Why cant anybody ever play my RPs? I had such a good idea!
Refresh my memory, but there really isn't much backstory.

Here's how I'd make it better:

Talk about the planet (Is it like earth? How did a city get isolated on this planet
Give a geography lesson of the planet. What is the Kazent Jungle?
What type of strange things have been happening?
What is this "Dark storm?"Basically, you need to introduce the setting slightly. You didn't give anyone much to work with.

Anyway, the above is what I'd do to fix this up. That, and you could probably join a few RP's in here so people could get to know your writing style (I don't recall your name, so I dunno how you write, and chances are, I'm not the only one...)

[DarkMirror]

I guess. But I dont find the planet very important, and the dark storm is metaforical. Oh, and the bad things will be described in the game.

Hey! would you make thgis thread for, me, co-gamemaster, and help me make more details?
Probobly not, but I can hope...

[Vhaeraun]

Hey! would you make thgis thread for, me, co-gamemaster, and help me make more details?
Probobly not, but I can hope...
I would, but I have one of my own atm, and I've got a bunch of stuff to do already this week (Got 2 essays due Wednesday, with a 3rd being written ON Wednesday...)

But, you could write something a bit more in depth, and send it to me via PM (Preferably in a .doc or .rtf) and I'll be happy to read over it when I get time ;)