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Leosam096
02-10-2006, 11:47 PM
(dream 021106)

the sky was grey when i ran across the city ruins where i onced played with my good friends.i raced on the ruins of the once tall building that were now crumbled in ruins...until i stumbled upon the grey old graveyard, now half of it destroyed.i stared at the highest area where Sirus and i fought and played. memories past my head along with the breeze of the wind that caught a grasp on my dark hair.my head was down cast while my eyes wouldn't stop staring on the wet ground where i was standing...grass were on the bed of the pool.the pool water was similar to the other waterbed where Ina died.i cried and couldn't believe what my memories are trying to show me.i was still in the stage of grief and mourning.
i fell on my knees until i saw an old man,smaller than i am...and two other men appeared up on the highest area where i fought and played with my good friend Sirus...
"you're late samuel..."the old man said,"where are your friends Sirus and Vaina?"
i lifted my head up to the old man and stood up.i casted my head down again but tried to stop my tears from falling,"Ina...i couldn't save her...Sirus...i don't..."i slowed down and stopped talking...
"perhaps...but news has been said that they were here a few days ago...three days ago!"
i quickly lifted my head up and my tears stopped falling,"they're alive?how?"
"three days ago my men and i saw Sirus walking across the highest area,he shed tears...but seconds later we saw Vaina appear on his back and started talking to him.she was fairer than ever like an angel!"(in the dream i heard the old man was talking about Sirus and Ina being alive and that Ina appeared and was whiter than snow)
we stopped the conversation and the old man and his men were now looking at the passing grey skies.a figure then appeared on the left side of my back...but i knew right away who it was somehow.he was wearing black...like what i was wearing.
"vincent..."i said.
"yes...old friend."he replied.
"any news about Sirus and Ina?"
"Sirus was with me a few days ago...he was crying and shared to me how Vaina died...but Sirus said after the story that...she is alive."
Then i knew i had to move on until i find out.
(after he said the words "she is alive" the dream ends and i woke up at 6:00 am...)

my urge to write stories started with a series of dreams...always changes year after year...the story of Sirus,Ina,Vincent,Shinn and i,Samuel...but surprisingly this dream will become the last part of book II of the Guardian Saga,which handles the accounts of Sirus, Vaina and Vincent,which i am willing to finish as my first complete big novel book at my young years...

i hope that when i'm finished writing it...you guys would read it. :D

TranquilNightElf
02-10-2006, 11:51 PM
Nicely done, I like the image that you paint as you tell of the dream.
Makes me want to read the novel .. a lot :)
What is the setting ? future destroyed?, destiny?. It kinda has a slight feel to it the kind Anime sagas do.

~TNE

Leosam096
02-11-2006, 12:15 AM
every book has its own story...if you think of it like a final fantasy or something...i can't do anything about it.

their nation was annihilated by a great empire which came under the rule of a new emperor. the great cities were destroyed and all thats left of the defending cities were rubbles.the lands of Birima set up their great force called the Guardian and chose the best warriors and knights of the land to defend against the emperor until then,they shal rebuild their city.the survivors of the last defending city fled to the mountains but then...i only explain it from here.

what i know is that their story is sad...from the way my dreams saw it and my heart was touched...

TranquilNightElf
02-11-2006, 1:16 AM
I actually like Anime sagas..but at the same time am not labelling your work so. Just saying that it does have a slight resemblance.

Should be a good read when you finish it. Keep it coming :)

Leosam096
02-11-2006, 1:34 AM
well thanks...actually i'm glad you liked it...and yes,this should be in the creative concepts.