Soviet_Marauder
03-25-2004, 1:22 PM
Hey Im new to this forum but Ive been a fan of sc/bw for a long time now....and I started thinking of a little story, but I wanna see some thoughts or reactions to the small intro I wrote up to see if I'll keep writing....so please...take a bit of time and read this, tell me what you think
Years after the Brood wars the swarm is still rampaging through the galaxy under the command of the Queen of Blades…The UED needs a savior…and their prayers will soon be answered….
“It was an ordinary day, the usual report on casualties from the frontlines, the occasional doomsayers, demanding penitence to survive the oncoming scourge. But no, this was a great day in the history of humanity, through genetic manipulation their prayers have been answered by the birth of a small baby girl. This girls name was Lenina Crown, born into the Russian Federation, one of the major powers in the UED. More news will be brought to you as soon as we receive it, but for now, please remember to make your donations at your local War Effort station, and pray for our men on the frontlines.” He slammed the newspaper down in a fit of frustration, snapping the small LED screen screaming lies that the war was going well. He knew what was happening, he knew that the UED was sending men, young and old, to their “glorious” deaths in this war against a savage enemy…He also knew something had to change…He has seen this war going on for far to long. Memories of men being gutted by zerglings like little play toys ravaged his sanity. The smell of flesh sizzling on psi blades had permeated his clothes to the point where it never left him…He had seen his best friends, his comrades, his loved ones, fall to the swarm. The prescence of this new threat hounded him as well…who were they…whos’ side are they on….they slay protoss and zerg alike, and yet their ships display zerg and protoss signatures…he knew he was better of dead on Aiur with Fenix…but something pushed him on…so much has happened, the birth of this new “savior”, the loss of so many of his loved ones…they told him everything would be better when he joined the UED…said he’d have a whole regiment to himself, the best of the best, to help combat the swarm. “What a load of bullshit…” he said….but he did it anyway, not for the sake of the of the UED but for those he lost, and those he wishes to gain back…but he knew that there had to be another way…Lenina Crown…was she the other way?…He sat in a deep thought for hours, men pounded on his door wondering whether he would be the new case of suicide amongst the officers…His wife was busy tending to the wounded, acid burns, flesh torn from the bone, friendly fire, and stress induced self inflicted wounds were becoming all to common…he knew something needed to be done…and that somehow it involved this little girl…he hopped on his vulture, and sped off towards a new hope….or his own doom….
so please...let me know what you think...if I get good responses then I'll keep writing, and I have lots of ideas, involving old areas and heros that we sc fanatics all remember and love...
Years after the Brood wars the swarm is still rampaging through the galaxy under the command of the Queen of Blades…The UED needs a savior…and their prayers will soon be answered….
“It was an ordinary day, the usual report on casualties from the frontlines, the occasional doomsayers, demanding penitence to survive the oncoming scourge. But no, this was a great day in the history of humanity, through genetic manipulation their prayers have been answered by the birth of a small baby girl. This girls name was Lenina Crown, born into the Russian Federation, one of the major powers in the UED. More news will be brought to you as soon as we receive it, but for now, please remember to make your donations at your local War Effort station, and pray for our men on the frontlines.” He slammed the newspaper down in a fit of frustration, snapping the small LED screen screaming lies that the war was going well. He knew what was happening, he knew that the UED was sending men, young and old, to their “glorious” deaths in this war against a savage enemy…He also knew something had to change…He has seen this war going on for far to long. Memories of men being gutted by zerglings like little play toys ravaged his sanity. The smell of flesh sizzling on psi blades had permeated his clothes to the point where it never left him…He had seen his best friends, his comrades, his loved ones, fall to the swarm. The prescence of this new threat hounded him as well…who were they…whos’ side are they on….they slay protoss and zerg alike, and yet their ships display zerg and protoss signatures…he knew he was better of dead on Aiur with Fenix…but something pushed him on…so much has happened, the birth of this new “savior”, the loss of so many of his loved ones…they told him everything would be better when he joined the UED…said he’d have a whole regiment to himself, the best of the best, to help combat the swarm. “What a load of bullshit…” he said….but he did it anyway, not for the sake of the of the UED but for those he lost, and those he wishes to gain back…but he knew that there had to be another way…Lenina Crown…was she the other way?…He sat in a deep thought for hours, men pounded on his door wondering whether he would be the new case of suicide amongst the officers…His wife was busy tending to the wounded, acid burns, flesh torn from the bone, friendly fire, and stress induced self inflicted wounds were becoming all to common…he knew something needed to be done…and that somehow it involved this little girl…he hopped on his vulture, and sped off towards a new hope….or his own doom….
so please...let me know what you think...if I get good responses then I'll keep writing, and I have lots of ideas, involving old areas and heros that we sc fanatics all remember and love...